Forget The Unforgotten

Title: Forget The Unforgotten

Author: Fvone =)

URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Fvone/

Reviewed by: Natasha

Title = 9/10

Interesting and unique title!!! Attract reader’s attention easily.

Creativity of the story = 18/20

Mmmm, romance!! So far, I have not read across any fanfic, which started off like that. But, I love the way you describe the atmosphere and expression of the characters.

Posters & background = 8 /10

The font and the colour of the words enable readers to continue reading the chapters, without hurting the eyes. As for the poster, it’s lovely and the black background really matches the poster

Casts used = 4/5

Hebe and Aaron??? Although this pairing is commonly seen in Winglin, but it can be considered one of my favourite pairing too. Hahahah XD

Originality= 18/20

I love how the story goes when at the beginning Hebe meet Arron in such an awkward situation. At the old lift with silence filling the air. Then how Hebe takes care of Arron when he’s in hospital. That so sweet!! The most shocking was how Arron’s ex girlfriend, Selina, have a relationship with Ella.

Storyline/plotting = 18 /20

You have a pretty interesting foreword that attracts my attention. The plot is finely written with a great range of vocabulary. Thumb up for you!! Smooth flow in the storyline and I love the way you build up the suspense and romance in the story.

Spelling/Grammar = 4/5

Spotted error in two chapters – 1 and 6. In chapter 1, paragraph 3, it’s stated, “She left him for another girl.” Instead, I think it should be “He left her for another girl.”In chapter 6, paragraph17, the “ex- conflict” should be corrected to “ex-convict” instead.Overall, the grammar and vocabulary is good.

Overall enjoyment = 10 /10

I’m not really a big fan of Arron and Hebe, but I really did enjoy this fanfic. It's great so keep on updating, especially when O’s Level is already over! I’m very anxious to know what will happen next since Arron’s father is Uncle Ben and I’m also anticipating patiently for the relationship between Arron and Hebe to blossom.

Total: 89