Poetically Pathetic

Fanfic Title: Poetically Pathetic

Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/poet_pathetic/

Reviewed by: Lovie

Title: 8/10

This is an interesting title. I was attracted to it. It sounded very sad. But, I didn’t quite get, how it is related to the story. Perhaps, it will be revealed soon, as the story unfolds. Still, I would like to comment that your title is original and eye-catching. :]

Cast used: 5/5

Personally, I really like this pairing very much, because it is rarely seen on Winglin. I would actually encourage authors to try out different pairings. And, I would like to comment that this is a nice try out. Interesting indeed. =)

Forewords: 7/10

This foreword is quite alright. But, you can probably improve on it by giving a brief summary or prologue to keep suspense. In that way, readers would read on to find out more. :D

Poster and Background: 9/10

Oh yes, this is the one! I like the poster very much! The colours and effects used, has enhanced the mood of the story. It did give readers a feeling of “Poetically Pathetic”. Perhaps, it would help if you add a background? Maybe, it can help to spice up the mood. :)

Plot: 13/15

Your storyline and plot is good. But, because the story is unfinished, it’s hard for me to review.

Still, I would like to comment for your hard work. The organization of ideas is neat and well-planned, keeping readers in suspense, and wanting to read more. The story flow is smooth too, where the ideas are easily perceived.

Originality and creativity: 13/15

I like the way you fix up different characters and bringing them together, especially Ashin as a DJ. This plot is rarely seen. I would love to understand a DJ’s life and see how their lives are like…

Language (Spelling and Grammar): 10/10

So, far, I didn’t spot any spelling or grammar mistakes at all. Good job! Anyway, I got to comment that, you have a beautiful language. The descriptions were intricate. Certainly, you can write better chapters, isn’t it? Keep up the good work though! =D

Overall enjoyment: 18/20

Overall, I love reading your story! It is a wonderful one! I really did enjoy myself, having a good laugh when the three guys were teasing each other… And, I like the way you add Chun and Ella to spice up the story. Keep up the good job!

Reader friendly: 2/5

Not to worry, my dear friend. You will soon have readers popping in after awhile. Wait patiently! But, you can have my word. I will definitely stay tuned to this! :DD

Bonus: 3/3

Thanks for linking Midnight tree. This bonus marks are for you! Hehes. =P

Total: 88

Extra comments: I would suggest that you send this story for a review again, because it is currently uncompleted. It would definitely fairer to you if reviewers judge it, based on a completed story. Remember to keep up the good work! Good luck to you! =DD