Title: 我们说好的 [The Promise]
Author: by ZeNd
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/lucifera/
Reviewed by: imgnts
Title: 7/10
The title sounds really meaningful, but since you haven’t finished the story yet, I think that’s why the title doesn’t seem to be related to the story yet.
Cast Used: 4/5
So for your casts, you have made it clear in the beginning, but maybe because some of their names are quite similar.. and that I don’t really know much about Korean artists, so I sometimes get it mixed up, but that’s just me haha, but good job on your pick on characters. One thing is that, you might want to pick fewer main characters because it might be confusing at times.
Foreword: 7/10
In the forewords, you described each character briefly but you could maybe have added a touch of the stories’ plot as well to keep character’s interest? But other than that, I think it was well done and you gave credits to your poster maker.
Poster & Background: --/10
I can’t see your poster so I would deduct 10 marks from the final mark since it won’t be fair if I just give you 0 because I can’t see the poster. But I can give some feedbacks on the background colour as well as font colour. I personally think that the background colour matches the story quite well since it’s kind of mysterious and the font makes it even more of a thriller story and the colour isn’t too hard to read so good choice of colour =)
Plot: 15/15
Your plot is definitely really interesting, I’m sure it would capture a lot of reader’s interests because who knows who JaeJoong will go with in the end – would it be BoA or TaeYeon? And would BoA come back to JaeJoong since she still loves her? Those were good questions you mentioned in the forewords that would definitely increase reader’s curiosity about the story.
Originality & Creativity: 15/15
I have personally never really read any stories similar to this storyline or plot.. or even if I have, it might have been too long to remember haha but this is going really well, keep it going!
Spelling & Grammar: 7/10
You can fix on some spelling mistakes for example, you tend to use “quiet” instead of “quite” I caught that a lot of times while reading your story. And some grammar mistakes such as using the right words.. etc. But I still understood your story so I guess it’s not too bad.
Overall Enjoyment: 16/20
When I read your story, I personally kept getting confused between all the characters. Sometimes I’d understand when you mention who’s POV the thoughts are in, but sometimes you don’t really write it out, so I’m wondering, is it in narrative form or is it in someone’s POV?
Reader Friendly: 5/5
You’ve replied to the comments and answered questions asked in your comment box, good job!
Total: 76/90
Bonus: 0/3 – Link back to us for bonus marks !
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Note: Due to a breakdown of communication, the webmistresses made a misktake by forward your request to 2 different reviewer. And since they already did their job, I decided to post both imgnts and keleos work up! kudos to them both since both was reviewed reasonably well and we're very sorry about that!*that a review was done twice* lol
Author: by ZeNd
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/lucifera/
Reviewed by: imgnts
Title: 7/10
The title sounds really meaningful, but since you haven’t finished the story yet, I think that’s why the title doesn’t seem to be related to the story yet.
Cast Used: 4/5
So for your casts, you have made it clear in the beginning, but maybe because some of their names are quite similar.. and that I don’t really know much about Korean artists, so I sometimes get it mixed up, but that’s just me haha, but good job on your pick on characters. One thing is that, you might want to pick fewer main characters because it might be confusing at times.
Foreword: 7/10
In the forewords, you described each character briefly but you could maybe have added a touch of the stories’ plot as well to keep character’s interest? But other than that, I think it was well done and you gave credits to your poster maker.
Poster & Background: --/10
I can’t see your poster so I would deduct 10 marks from the final mark since it won’t be fair if I just give you 0 because I can’t see the poster. But I can give some feedbacks on the background colour as well as font colour. I personally think that the background colour matches the story quite well since it’s kind of mysterious and the font makes it even more of a thriller story and the colour isn’t too hard to read so good choice of colour =)
Plot: 15/15
Your plot is definitely really interesting, I’m sure it would capture a lot of reader’s interests because who knows who JaeJoong will go with in the end – would it be BoA or TaeYeon? And would BoA come back to JaeJoong since she still loves her? Those were good questions you mentioned in the forewords that would definitely increase reader’s curiosity about the story.
Originality & Creativity: 15/15
I have personally never really read any stories similar to this storyline or plot.. or even if I have, it might have been too long to remember haha but this is going really well, keep it going!
Spelling & Grammar: 7/10
You can fix on some spelling mistakes for example, you tend to use “quiet” instead of “quite” I caught that a lot of times while reading your story. And some grammar mistakes such as using the right words.. etc. But I still understood your story so I guess it’s not too bad.
Overall Enjoyment: 16/20
When I read your story, I personally kept getting confused between all the characters. Sometimes I’d understand when you mention who’s POV the thoughts are in, but sometimes you don’t really write it out, so I’m wondering, is it in narrative form or is it in someone’s POV?
Reader Friendly: 5/5
You’ve replied to the comments and answered questions asked in your comment box, good job!
Total: 76/90
Bonus: 0/3 – Link back to us for bonus marks !
__________
Note: Due to a breakdown of communication, the webmistresses made a misktake by forward your request to 2 different reviewer. And since they already did their job, I decided to post both imgnts and keleos work up! kudos to them both since both was reviewed reasonably well and we're very sorry about that!*that a review was done twice* lol
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