Before The Last Leaf Falls

Title: Before The Last Leaf Falls

Author: JiShin

URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/jishin5/

Reviewed by: Lovie

Title: 10/10

Oh my god! How should I describe this? The title is simply beautiful. :)

Casts: 5/5

Wow. I love the casts! Jae Joong and Yunho! I have not read a story on Jaeho before. To me, it sounds interesting! =)

Forewords: 9/10

Yes of course, I would give you a good grade for such an interesting prologue. It managed to catch my attention and keep me in suspense, hardly able to wait for the next chapter. I love it! However, perhaps it would be better if you include a character introduction although you did mention who the main characters are. Characters are the ones who sketched the story, thus it would be important for you to introduce them! :D

Background and Poster: 8/10

Personally, I think that the background is awesome! No doubt, it was perfectly well done, with fawn as the main colour. It did manage to enhance readers in an “autumn mood”. However, I would like to comment that, perhaps an inclusion of poster would be better. In the poster, quotes can be included for example, “Before the last leaf falls, I’ll be back” and even, “Next Fall, we won’t miss the last leaf of Autumn again”. Such phrases are capable of evoking emotions and thoughts in readers. So, this is a little suggestion for you, do request for a poster to spice up your story! =D

Plot: 15/15

Wonderful! It was really fantastic. :D
And, the story flow is smooth.

Originality and creativity: 13/15

Perhaps, it is not as refreshing and new to me anymore. I have read or seen such storylines before. But, I must really comment that yours is quite different, and outstanding. Though similar, you managed to stand it out with intricate details of the season, autumn, and making it special. :D

Language (Spelling and Grammar): 10/10

Well done! So far, I did not spot any spelling and grammar mistakes. Keep it up!
And, I must say that your language is beautiful! It shaped the story into a special one! =DD

Overall enjoyment: 18/20
I’m enjoying myself immensely, while reading your story! Intricate details have outlined powerful image in my mind, as though I’m watching a movie. However, the climax isn’t really that exciting. Perhaps, you can describe that particular moment in more details? It has yet to reach the climax when Jae Joong sat beside him. You can describe more to keep the readers suspense before the answer is revealed. Again, a little suggestion for you, do take note of that!

Reader friendly: 5/5

Good job! You are friendly, answering the readers’ doubts. Keep it up! =]

Bonus: 0/3

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Total: 93/100

Extra comments: WOW! 93! That was awesome! Your story is a spectacular one. Remember to keep up the good work! I will be looking forward to more of your stories in future. :DD