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http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/babyangel/
Written by: [ /\ v /\ ] babyangel [ /\ v /\ ]
Reviewed by: imgnts

Title: 9/10
The title seems to suit the story well in one way, but also in another way, it doesn’t seem to fit. For example, I’m thinking about the part with Hebe and Aaron, like they both have feelings for each other, but why don’t they try? I know they’ve tried once and it didn’t work out but then…maybe it will now.

Cast Used: 4/5
Good and clear casts used in the story, but then again, it can get confusing at some parts. Especially before when Hebe was talking to Prince online and you had to refer to someone as “the guy” and some Prince as “Killer” and then Selina also had a “guy” so that part was really confusing, I wasn’t sure whether those two “guy” were the same person or not.

Foreword: 8/10
You sure gave good information on the characters and maybe you can add some little bits of details from the story? It’s understandable that some people do the “go-with-the-flow” kind of story but then if you have a general plot in your story, it doesn’t hurt to just mention it :]

Poster & Background: 10/10
I personally think your poster is awesome! I love how it can switch between pictures XD [I never knew these could be used haha] well anyways, I like how you used a solid background; it makes it simple looking yet elegant, especially with the colour you chose, good job!

Plot: 14/15
I was definitely thrown off the track there with the two “Aaron’s”. I had no idea Prince would end up being Aaron’s brother. And thank god that it’s not some creeper haha. And that Edison sure is evil in this story o.O – not to mention horrible.

Originality & Creativity: 13/15
You’ve got a lot of creativity in this story for sure, but then again, it seems as though a lot of stories are like this, especially with the characters that you’ve picked, it’s pretty hard to be original in the storyline. But even though, I think you’ve kept it fairly original with all the different twists and such.

Spelling & Grammar: 8/10
I’ve noticed you used a lot of dialogue in your story, but maybe you can alternate between dialogue and paragraph form? Like have some more inner thought instead of having it all said out loud. It’s just some alternative methods of presenting your story, but you’re doing a really good job presenting it already =)

Overall Enjoyment: 20/20
I definitely enjoyed reading your story! I’m going to want to read on until you finish it too! Can’t wait to see what happens next! Will there be even more twists? o.O Haha, anyways good job on the story! I really had fun reading it, all the thrill and excitements and of course, the cliff-hangers you add in that just make us want to click “next” even when there is none! =P

Reader Friendly: 5/5
Wow! You have a lot of readers, but your story is definitely worth the read :) It’s also a good thing to reply to your reader’s comments, and sometimes, you can also get some ideas from the readers too :]

Total: 91 + 3 = 94/100

Bonus: 3/3 – Thanks for linking back to us!