My Man In Action

Title: My Man In Action

Author: by XD_LolliPops_XD

URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/XD_LolliPops_XD/

Reviewed by: Lamer_

Title = 10/10

Nice Title.. Lovely.. It does really suit your story theme.. The name is short and easy to remember, caught my attention when I first read it.. Great Job..

Cast = 4/5

Arron and selina.. Both Is my favorite.. Nice pairing.. :) One thing is the name of the cast, you use another name for them, it’s pretty hard and confusing to remember..

Foreword = 8.5/10

A lovely foreword by you.. It does tell the reader a little on what to expect for the story.. A rather interesting foreword..

Poster & Background = 8.5/10

Lovely Poster used.. It suit the mood of the story.. The colour you use for the words doesn’t hurt the readers eye unlike some.. Great Job done..

Plot = 11.5/15

The plot is finely write out.. The story flow was nice.. One thing is.. About the cast name.. It’s a bit confusing and messy.. I have to go back to foreword to know who is who in the cast.. Look out for that.. Maybe add in more emotion part of the story to enhance the story.. The ending was super sad as both the main cast die.. But i still love the story a lot.. :)

Originality & Creativity = 12.5 /15

The storyline was super.. :) The flow and the creative-ness enhance the story and made it rather interesting to read.. The idea of a guy going to girls school for a dare and slowly fall in love with the room-mate with some twist in it interest me to read on..

Language (Spelling & Grammar) = 8.5/10

Not bad.. Only spot a few.. Overall it’s all right..

Overall enjoyment = 18.5/20

Lovely story.. I really enjoy every minute reading it.. I can’t stop laughing at some part.. It’s really funny.. Nice job done.. :) The twist in the is lovely too.. About Vera sickness making corey realise whom he really love.. Nice one.. It's sad that both Corey and Vera dead in the end.. God..

Reader Friendly = 5/5

The writer is very friendly and reply the readers.. Great job.. :)

Bonus Mark!
Link Back To Us: 3/3

Thanks you for linking us up.. :)

Total: 90

Addition remark: So sorry to let you wait for so long.. I was down was flu the whole week and only manage to review now when I’m well enough.. Hope you like it.. Cheers.. :)