Forever and a Day

Title: Forever and a Day

Author: by [[ SuGaR pLuMz ]]

URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/SuGaRpLuMz/

Reviewed by: Lamer_

Title = 7.5/10

Lovely Title.. It attracts my attention when I first see it.. Nice one

Poster & Background = 7.5/10

I find the poster nice and lovely.. Pretty match the theme of the story.. :)

Foreword = 7.5/10

A pretty short phrase or maybe so call poem to start the foreword was a pretty nice idea.. But i suggest you to make a little cast intro to kick off the foreword to let the reader understand more about the story.. JUst a penny of my thought

Cast = 4/5

I find that Chun and Ella pairing was pretty overuse in winglin.. But i like how you shape the character in the story.. :)


Originality & Creativity = 11.5 /15

Pretty common type of plot.. But some emotional part in the story enhance the story a little.. :) The sad part of ella waitting for her love to be return really made me feel so sad.. I mark up the points for the effort you put in to made the story more emotional yet interesting..




Plot = 11.5/15

I mention above that the plot is pretty commonly seen i winglin.. But i mark up for the emotional parts in the story as i can see some effort put in for that.. :)

Language (Spelling & Grammar) = 8.5/10

Not bad.. Hardly found any.. Only some small ones.. But overall it’s good.. :)

Flow Of The Story: 7.5/10


The story was smooth.. I like how it goes.. Good job.. The idea was well manage and organise in the story.. :) Good Job.. :)

Writing Style: 3.5/5

I like the way you write your story.. Clean and clear.. Easy to follow.. Good job.. :)


Overall enjoyment = 7.5/10

I really enjoy very much at some part.. But certain part of the story are pretty boring and rush sometimes.. But overall it's still a lovely story.. :) Couldn't say much as the story ain't finish yet, so do sent in for another round of review when you complete it..

Bonus Mark: 3/5

For your effort on some parts with emotional scene..

Total: 72

Additional Comment: Your story is nice and lovely.. Continue to update it then.. :) Good Luck.. :P

Reviewed By Lamer_@Midnight-tree.co.nr