Title: Strings of Complication
Written by: Miyuki
http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/miyuki
Reviewed By: imgnts
Title: 8/10
It’s a lovely title and brings a really soothing feeling but it doesn’t seem to be relating to your story yet, it might be because it’s not done yet or not to the climax.
Poster & Background: 9/10
Really pretty poster used, I really like the instrument in the background. I think you could have made the sub title a different other than green because that seems to not match the colour of your story as much. I like the quotes in the poster though, it’s really tells us something about the story.
Foreword: 6/10
Your foreword was really interesting, but it doesn’t really give enough information about the story itself and I’m not sure how the foreword was related to the story itself either.
Cast Used: 4/5
The amount of characters you chose was a good number, not too much and not too little, but then some confusions is that your poster contains more than you have wrote about so far, but they might be coming out later.
Originality & Creativity: 12/15
I like how it has a fairytale aura within the story, maybe because of the “Highness” and “Princess/Prince” but it just seems really fairytale like but in a way also like a tragic fairytale so far, but it might get better, or it might not.
Story & Plotting: 12/15
Your story is like a fairytale, but also not in a way and because of how your foreword was a bit confusing, it seems like there is no plot behind the story. But somehow, it’s kind of like a story which brings surprises every chapter.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
No grammar mistakes or spelling mistakes that I’ve noticed, and the level of vocabulary used is good.
Flow of Story: 8/10
The flow of the story is really smooth but from the foreword to the first chapter, I was confused because it was talking about someone being cornered by guys and then it goes on to a princess… but other than that, it was well done.
Writing Style: 4/5
Your style of writing is really easy to follow but sometimes, it’s confusing because I when I read it, I didn’t know who said which dialogues.
Overall Enjoyment: 7.5/10
At some parts of the story, I’m really confused about what is happening and at some parts it can be exciting, but overall, I think it might be because you haven’t finished your story yet, or you might want to be more precise on some parts in the story.
Bonus marks: 2/5
For making a story and dedicating it to a friend, really thoughtful of you to do that.
Total mark: 82.5/100
Reviewed By: imgnts
Title: 8/10
It’s a lovely title and brings a really soothing feeling but it doesn’t seem to be relating to your story yet, it might be because it’s not done yet or not to the climax.
Poster & Background: 9/10
Really pretty poster used, I really like the instrument in the background. I think you could have made the sub title a different other than green because that seems to not match the colour of your story as much. I like the quotes in the poster though, it’s really tells us something about the story.
Foreword: 6/10
Your foreword was really interesting, but it doesn’t really give enough information about the story itself and I’m not sure how the foreword was related to the story itself either.
Cast Used: 4/5
The amount of characters you chose was a good number, not too much and not too little, but then some confusions is that your poster contains more than you have wrote about so far, but they might be coming out later.
Originality & Creativity: 12/15
I like how it has a fairytale aura within the story, maybe because of the “Highness” and “Princess/Prince” but it just seems really fairytale like but in a way also like a tragic fairytale so far, but it might get better, or it might not.
Story & Plotting: 12/15
Your story is like a fairytale, but also not in a way and because of how your foreword was a bit confusing, it seems like there is no plot behind the story. But somehow, it’s kind of like a story which brings surprises every chapter.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
No grammar mistakes or spelling mistakes that I’ve noticed, and the level of vocabulary used is good.
Flow of Story: 8/10
The flow of the story is really smooth but from the foreword to the first chapter, I was confused because it was talking about someone being cornered by guys and then it goes on to a princess… but other than that, it was well done.
Writing Style: 4/5
Your style of writing is really easy to follow but sometimes, it’s confusing because I when I read it, I didn’t know who said which dialogues.
Overall Enjoyment: 7.5/10
At some parts of the story, I’m really confused about what is happening and at some parts it can be exciting, but overall, I think it might be because you haven’t finished your story yet, or you might want to be more precise on some parts in the story.
Bonus marks: 2/5
For making a story and dedicating it to a friend, really thoughtful of you to do that.
Total mark: 82.5/100
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