*Wishes Made Under Midnight-Tree*

Title: *Wishes Made Under Midnight-Tree*
Author: Lovie
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/lovie11/
Reviewed By: v

Title: 10/10
Since it’s a Midnight-Tree’s challenge, I shall award full marks, since Lovie didn’t have a choice over it.

Poster & Background: 8/10
It’s a pretty nice poser. The dark background of the fan fiction and the gloomy effect in the poster indicated a sad emotion. The quote, ‘We’re calling for a last miracle…’ further adds on to the melancholy. But I thought Hebe’s picture was rather blurred, hence the couple of marks deducted.

Foreword: 9/10
A nice foreword which was slightly different from what I’ve imagined. The forewords were rather sweet, with Hebe dressed prettily, off to meet Jae Joong, probably her lover (from what I’ve concluded after seeing the poster). By including wild animals commonly found in the woods and the Enchanted Forest injected some innocence to the story.

It ended, leaving me hanging there, desperately trying to figure out the reason for Jae Joong to present Hebe a tree as a present. I’m not a J-pop fan, hence I can only judge Jae Joong by the personalities you had infused and also the expression he had in the poster.

Cast Used: 4/5
Hebe and Jae Joong was a new pairing, I believe. I’ve never read any fan fictions with them. But casts aside, I like the way Hebe sounded child-like while, Jae Joong was pretty much being prudish, well-mannered and friendly.

Originality & Creativity: 10/15
The story is quite original and creative, since not many stories include childhood fantasies such as speaking to animals and having found a wish-granting tree. Even though that part on animals was just Hebe’s dream.

However, the accidental discovery of Jae Joong’s diary and Jae Joong leaving Hebe for studies, are now a common scene found in stories. This was where the other five marks went to.
Story & Plotting: 10/15There isn’t much to find fault with except of the two overused scenes which I had mentioned earlier. I like the way you ended the story. It wasn’t exactly a ‘end’, thus allows readers to exercise their imagination and figure if Jae Joong would come back soon, or would Hebe give up waiting. It makes me think of the Midnight Tree too, if anyone would find it and wish for something sincerely.

And I guess that’s all about it.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
I didn’t spot any spelling mistakes, or wrong sentence structure. Sophisticated vocabulary words were found, almost in all chapters posted. But no one can really score full marks for language… right?

Flow Of Story: 9/10
The story flowed well, I wasn’t very much lost, the way I sometimes would.

Writing Style: 4/5
Extensive descriptions permit images to be formed in the reader’s mind, allowing the readers to relate to the story better.

Perfect it may seem, I do think there’s room for a greater improvement. After all, there isn’t really a perfect writing style, is there?

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10
I did enjoy the story, and had wished a couple of times that the real ending would be in Chapter 6. Obviously, the Midnight Tree doesn’t grant me my wishes.
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Bonus marks: 5/5
I award you full marks in this section because I believe every story has this little X-factor. And I do think yours does. I like the last few sentences in the story, ‘It remains unknown and mysterious. But, there’s something for sure. I know Midnight Tree will not let me down.’ Total mark: 86/100 Additional comments:Thanks for being my very first official review. Your story is really good, but like I’ve mentioned, there really isn’t a perfect (insert marking scheme criteria here). There’s always a room for improvements, even if you’re close to perfect. And good luck with your future fan fictions (:

Reviewed by v @ midnight-tree.co.nr