Title: When loving you is so hard
Author: ZeNd
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/lucifera2
Reviewed By: Lovie
Title: 6/10
Although I agree very much with that title, but I can’t really give you a good grade for this because it has been overly-used and lacks of brightness. A point to remember, a title is very important for a story because it is the only overview of the story it can be seen on the website. Thus, you will have to be more creative in order to attract the readers. Work harder =)
Poster & Background: 9/10
Hey, I like that poster. It is pretty and well done. However, I think you background seems to be plain. It would certainly be better if you could request for a background too. Just a little suggestion for you. =]
Foreword: 5/10
To me, the forewords you have here is incomplete. The preview seems too brief. Too brief to keep the readers in suspense. As for the character introduction, it is also too brief. Last but not least, in overall, the forewords revealed a typical storyline which may not interest readers at all. But, I give you a pass because at least, you made the efforts to work on your forewords. Kindly edit it and improve it! I’m sure it’s going to be a much better one than before!
Cast Used: 4/5
I have to admit, this is the first time I have seen these casts. I’m not really familiar with them, but I still like the sound of it. Good job. =)
Originality & Creativity: 8/15
As I have said just now, the forewords reflects quite a typical storyline. The story lacks of some climaxes to interest the readers. Perhaps, due to the incomplete story, the story has not hit the main action yet. So, I would suggest, request again after you have completed the story. Work harder! =]
Story & Plotting: 10/15
I shan’t double-penalise you on your story plot. But, as for the plotting of the story, I have a little suggestion for you. I thought it be better if you could leave a cliff-hanger at the end of each chapter to keep the readers in suspense, and make them want to read more! Is that alright? :D
Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 7/10
I spotted some mistakes in spelling and grammar. But, it isn’t too bad in overall. Just remember to check your work after each chapter, using the Microsoft Words. =)
Flow Of Story: 8/10
Generally, the flow of story is smooth. Ideas are well organized. Keep up the good work, girl! =D
Writing Style: 3/5
With regards to your writing style, I’m actually alright with it. However, I find it confusing when you insert the dates. I might be confused when the event is taking place, is it a flashback or something… Do take note of that. But, don’t worry. It’s really alright. :)
Overall Enjoyment: 6.5/10
As I have said previously, the story lacks of some brightness to interest the readers. But generally, I still enjoy this story because I will get so tensed when I read the conflict between DongHae and Yoochun. That was nice. Continue to work hard! :DD
Bonus marks: 2.5/5
There are just some tiny mistakes here and there. It would certainly be better if you take not of them and make changes to them. =DD
Total mark: 69/100
Additional comments: Hellos! Here’s the review! In overall, I gave a 69. But please do not be discouraged by it. Your story is good, but it would certainly if you put in more efforts. I’m sure. =) So, I hope you make the necessary changes to the story. What matters the most is, enjoy writing! Keep up the good work. I will try to pop in whenever possible, to read your story. Don’t worry, you have my support. :)
If you have any enquires, contact me by email or leave me a tag at Midnight Tree. Good luck to your fanfic! :DD
Reviewed by(Lovie)@midnight-tree.co.nr
Author: ZeNd
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/lucifera2
Reviewed By: Lovie
Title: 6/10
Although I agree very much with that title, but I can’t really give you a good grade for this because it has been overly-used and lacks of brightness. A point to remember, a title is very important for a story because it is the only overview of the story it can be seen on the website. Thus, you will have to be more creative in order to attract the readers. Work harder =)
Poster & Background: 9/10
Hey, I like that poster. It is pretty and well done. However, I think you background seems to be plain. It would certainly be better if you could request for a background too. Just a little suggestion for you. =]
Foreword: 5/10
To me, the forewords you have here is incomplete. The preview seems too brief. Too brief to keep the readers in suspense. As for the character introduction, it is also too brief. Last but not least, in overall, the forewords revealed a typical storyline which may not interest readers at all. But, I give you a pass because at least, you made the efforts to work on your forewords. Kindly edit it and improve it! I’m sure it’s going to be a much better one than before!
Cast Used: 4/5
I have to admit, this is the first time I have seen these casts. I’m not really familiar with them, but I still like the sound of it. Good job. =)
Originality & Creativity: 8/15
As I have said just now, the forewords reflects quite a typical storyline. The story lacks of some climaxes to interest the readers. Perhaps, due to the incomplete story, the story has not hit the main action yet. So, I would suggest, request again after you have completed the story. Work harder! =]
Story & Plotting: 10/15
I shan’t double-penalise you on your story plot. But, as for the plotting of the story, I have a little suggestion for you. I thought it be better if you could leave a cliff-hanger at the end of each chapter to keep the readers in suspense, and make them want to read more! Is that alright? :D
Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 7/10
I spotted some mistakes in spelling and grammar. But, it isn’t too bad in overall. Just remember to check your work after each chapter, using the Microsoft Words. =)
Flow Of Story: 8/10
Generally, the flow of story is smooth. Ideas are well organized. Keep up the good work, girl! =D
Writing Style: 3/5
With regards to your writing style, I’m actually alright with it. However, I find it confusing when you insert the dates. I might be confused when the event is taking place, is it a flashback or something… Do take note of that. But, don’t worry. It’s really alright. :)
Overall Enjoyment: 6.5/10
As I have said previously, the story lacks of some brightness to interest the readers. But generally, I still enjoy this story because I will get so tensed when I read the conflict between DongHae and Yoochun. That was nice. Continue to work hard! :DD
Bonus marks: 2.5/5
There are just some tiny mistakes here and there. It would certainly be better if you take not of them and make changes to them. =DD
Total mark: 69/100
Additional comments: Hellos! Here’s the review! In overall, I gave a 69. But please do not be discouraged by it. Your story is good, but it would certainly if you put in more efforts. I’m sure. =) So, I hope you make the necessary changes to the story. What matters the most is, enjoy writing! Keep up the good work. I will try to pop in whenever possible, to read your story. Don’t worry, you have my support. :)
If you have any enquires, contact me by email or leave me a tag at Midnight Tree. Good luck to your fanfic! :DD
Reviewed by(Lovie)@midnight-tree.co.nr
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