Where Does The Rainbow End

Title: Where Does The Rainbow End
Author: by Miyuki
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/miyuki2/
Reviewed by: Lamer_

Title = 8.5/10

Since it’s an challenge title.. I won’t comment much on it.. :) But it’s nice and lovely.. :P

Poster & Background = --/10

I won’t mark on this because I believe every story should have a lovely poster.. You can go request it on those poster making site.. :)

Foreword = 7.5/10

A short intro of the cast and a little peek on the story.. It interest me to read on to find out what will happen next.. :) So good job.. :)

Cast = 3.5/5

I think that Fahrenheit and S.H.E overly use.. But don’t worry.. I can see your effort in shaping up the character in the story.. :)

Originality & Creativity = 9.5 /15

Well.. Your story is just about to start.. SO I couldn’t comment much on this.. But.. Until what you update so far.. I couldn’t see much original or creative-ness in it.. so I couldn’t give you much mark on this part.. But I like that part on Charlene dreaming becoming a ‘mother’ of Hebe.. It’s certainly cute..

Plot = 10/15
Pretty common plot until what you update.. Yet there are parts I like it very much.. Cute and lovely in it own ways.. :)

Language (Spelling & Grammar) = 8.5/10

Not bad.. Hardly found any.. Only some small ones.. But overall it’s good.. :)

Flow Of The Story: 8.5/10


The story was smooth.. I like how it goes.. Good job.. The idea was well manage and organise in the story.. :) Good Job.. :)

Writing Style: 4/5

I like the way you write your story.. Clean and clear.. Easy to follow.. Good job.. :)


Overall enjoyment = 8/10

I really enjoy very much at some part where it’s cute and lovely.. But certain part of the story are a little draggy.. But overall it's still a lovely story.. :) Couldn't say much as the story ain't finish yet, so do sent in for another round of review when you complete it..

Bonus Mark: 3/5

For your effort on making some lovely and cute parts.. :)

Total: 71

Additional Comment: Your story are cute and lovely.. Continue to update it. Jia You and good luck.. :)

Reviewed By Lamer_@Midnight-tree.co.nr