Celebrity vs Paparazzi

Title: Celebrity vs Paparazzi
Author: teriyaki18
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/tekay/
Reviewed By: v

Title: 8/10
The title seemed interesting, at least, enough for me to look forward to your chapters. The title gave me a clue on what I would be in for, probably an exciting journey with the secretive paparazzi.

Poster & Background: 8/10
I liked the choice of dark background colour. Since the title seemed to depict the sneaky paparazzi (trying to ‘dig’ information from the celebrity). Along with the bright colours in the middle portion of the poster, it made the main characters lively.

Foreword: 6/10
I have to admit, I didn’t read the previous story & thought that I may not be able to get the full picture of the story since I probably would have missed out quite a lot of little details from your previous story. But thankfully, I didn't (:

The forewords gave a little introduction to the characters involved in the story.

Cast Used: 4/5
Seriously, like what I’d told the other authors (whose stories I had previously reviewed), I’m not really familiar with the K-Pop. Hence, I’ll rate this section by the personality and characteristics you’ve injected into the characters (which to me, would be just names – if without a personality).

I liked the way their personalities were revealed slowly, through their conversations and actions; AJ’s strong character, venting her stress through physical methods, and Yunho’s gradual change.

Well done!

Originality & Creativity: 13/15
I’ve yet to really read fan fictions like yours, and I’m sure many of your readers would agree with me. You deserved the high rating, totally.

Especially the part on Nana.

Story & Plotting: 12/15
I thought it was not bad. The basketball match, unlike what I had expected, they lost. (Well you can’t blame me; all typical love stories have smooth sailing plots.) & I like the unexpected scenes.

The part on Nana was still the best – Yes, I’m not over Nana yet!

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
I must say, you have a strong language there.
Little common errors are inevitable. Oh wells, nobody’s perfect.

But you did great!

Flow Of Story: 8/10
Perfect. It wasn’t too fast, neither was it that slow.

Writing Style: 4/5
For the witty thoughts AJ had, and the way you had your characters’ emotions revealed in short, simple, yet “impact-ful” and influential sentences.

Overall Enjoyment: 9/10
I guess there isn’t much of a need to explain further.
I lost count of the number of times I said “I liked…”

Bonus marks: 3/5
For replying to comments and actually dedicating the last chapter to them to thank them for reading.

Total mark: 83/100

Additional comments:
I’ve finished reading a couple of days ago, but I was rushing through my report assignment. Sorry for the late review. I’ll hope to hear from you again through story reviews. And good luck with your remaining and future fan fictions!

Reviewed by v @midnight-tree.co.nr