Crushed

Title: Crushed

Author: by brokenrainbows

URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/shortstorycrush

Reviewed by: Lamer_

Title = 7.5/10

The title itself wasn't really too stands out in winglin.. However, I like how it is related to the story.. The sparks of the connection of the title and the story is really good.. :)

Poster & Background = --/10

Since u don't have a poster and background.. I shouldn't mark on this then.. :)

Foreword = 7/10

I like the short intro parahgraph in it.. :) The cast was also list out well.. :) So everything is fine.. Not too bad.. The short paragraph mades me when to read on.. :) Good job.. :)

Cast = 3/5

No much comment on the cast.. :) Great pairing.. But hardly seen any characterizations.. Reason being maybe it's 1 shot.. So it's harder.. :) But not bad overall.. :)

Originality & Creativity = 12.5 /15

Well.. It was rather a different kind of story.. Since it was your own experience, I believe it's very speical in some way.. Quite nice for a one shot story.. Although it's short, every emotion is well develop.. :)

Plot = 12.5/15

I love your plot for this story.. Clean and easy to read.. :) everything is well wrote out.. :) It's good.. You clearly developed the emotion out in the story well.. Good job.. :)

Language (Spelling & Grammar) = 9/10

Not bad.. Hardly found any.. Only some small ones.. But overall it’s good.. :)

Flow Of The Story: 8/10

The story is smooth.. The pace was just right.. It's clear and easy to follow.. Nice job.. :P

Writing Style: 4/5

I like the way you write your story.. Clean and clear.. Easy to follow.. Good job.. :) I'm rather comfortable with it.. :)

Overall enjoyment = 8/10

I enjoy every moment reading the story.. Myabe it's an own experience.. It's special in some way.. :) I really love it.. :P

Bonus Mark: 2/5

The effort of making the story.. :)

Total: 73.5

Additional Comment:

The storyline is lovely and nice.. :) Everything is clear stated out.. :P

Reviewed By Lamer_@Midnight-tree.co.nr