~*~ The Geeky Princess ~*~

Title: ~*~ The Geeky Princess ~*~
Author: Taelia
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/taelia
Reviewed By: Yuki.

Title: 4/10
The title failed to leave a deep impression on me of any sort. Yes, it might be more for clichéd lovers but I didn’t like the decorations you included because it appeared somewhat immature. However, it was nice to capitalize the beginning of each word because it was portrayed in tidier way.

Poster & Background: 0/10
I’m terribly sorry for the 0 I’m giving you in this section but your story is without a poster or background, an effort wasn’t made to change the font colours to at least beautify the page a little. A poster and background is rather essential for a story because many readers get attracted by them, so please request from a site or even make your own.

Foreword: 2/10
There wasn’t really much in the forewords, no extract, and no prologue. There was only a brief introduction of characters and only the names were given. I understand that people seldom read the forewords but a handful of people do. It is essential to put up the forewords to attract people into reading your story.

Cast Used: 4/5
ChaeYeon seems like your typical average girl, but with a complicated background. I guess that’s one thing different from the other female leads in other stories. I liked it even though she seemed strong, she was quite vulnerable and afraid. (E.g Chapter 2-3) I got confused when there were many male characters in the story popping out, it made me momentarily think that the male lead could be them instead. I liked that sense of mystery though.

PS I like the Super Junior assassin group idea xD.

Originality & Creativity: 8/15
I would say the starting of your story didn’t appeal much because it gave the impression of ‘playboy falls in love with beautiful girl’ thing, but it was quite intriguing reading ChaeYeon’s story, I must say. It was more or less a mixture of clichéd plots so it appealed more and held a sense of mystery.

Story&Plotting: 9/15
Your story was certainly well plotted from the beginning; everything was well explained and planned. It was rather confusing but detailed enough, you did put in much effort in planning everything. The story started well because it remained quite a mystery when the limelight turned to ChaeYeon and left JunSu hanging.

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 6/10
There was a fair amount of descriptions for their actions and appearance. The descriptions were quite general most of the time, like just ‘smile’, ‘looked’ and so on. A problem lies with your punctuation; you use too many full stops when it’s supposed to be a comma instead. Also, when there should be a comma, you don’t use any punctuation so the whole sentence becomes one whole mess. It’s a little hard to read, you should really take note of that. Occasionally, there are certain signs of slang. (e.g but what to do) I spotted several typing errors too, perhaps you should take some time to scan through your work before posting up another chapter.

Flow Of Story: 10/10
The story was well-paced, nothing was rushed. The characters were well introduced at the right time.

Writing Style: 2/5
Honestly, I got rather turned off by the paragraphs because one paragraph is very long, it is easy for readers to get lost in the paragraph. (e.g. first chapter) It wasn’t stated clearly between his thoughts, action and the message he sent to his friend. Everything was squeezed into one paragraph, therefore making everything difficult to understand. The dialogues were especially confusing because of the same problem. Other than that, everything is alright.

Overall Enjoyment: 7/10
I did enjoy your story, I like how ChaeYeon’s character stood out as a female lead compared to other stories.

Bonus marks: 4/5
I would definitely faint if I had to put in so much detail into a story. I think you did an amazing job in explaining stuff even though it was hard work and I applaud you for that.

Total mark: 56/100

Reviewed By: Yuki.@midnight-tree.co.nr