A Penny For Your Thoughts [ M-T Challenge ]

Title: A Penny for Your Thoughts [M-T Challenge]
Author: Sushi
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/A_P_F_Y_T/
Reviewed By: v

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Poster & Background: 7/10
Poster was very well done. It brings out a nostalgic feeling to the reader. Typically, the main colours of maudlin-related fan fiction posters are black, brown or grey. But this was different. The colour choice is very refreshing to me.

Forewords: 8/10
It’s a very sweet ending in the forewords. Faced with many frustrated thoughts and problems, the girl was able to so easily bring him out of his misery (temporarily). I’ve never thought of the title this way – an actual penny for one’s thoughts. Very well done, I must say. The sentence was a truly tempting and made me read on.

Cast Used: 4/5
Out of the few characters featured in the story, Kin Jung Hoog and Jung Da Bin are the only main characters, so I am going to focus on them. Kim Jung Hoog has this sad expression on his face, despite the weak smile on his face, in the poster. The story brings out the unsaid frustration he have had for the past several years, and also how hard he tries to be strong for his family; that made the Kim Jung Hoon in the poster suitable for the character in the story.

I’ve always liked Jung Da Bin, especially after watching Wonderful Life. The big round eyes she has makes her incredibly cute and innocent-looking. It is quite an appropriate decision-making here!

Originality & Creativity: 12/15
Unlike the typical love stories Winglin contains, this one has almost nothing to do with the characters being romantically in love. This story brings out the intelligence a kid, despite being very young, possesses.

Story & Plotting: 10/15
Short story has to have a plot with humongous impact, so as to let the readers remember the story over time despite having only a couple of chapters. It is not easy, but I reckon you have done so, through the conversations between Kim Jung Hoon and Jung Da Bin.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9/10
I haven’t really spotted any grammar mistakes, yet.
Great job there!

Flow Of Story: 7/10
The flow was okay, but because of the few flashbacks, it got me a little confused as to whether I’m reading the flashbacks or the current on-going conversations between Jung Hoon and Da Bin. But other than that, everything else is fine (:

Writing Style: 4/5
I do like your writing style, it describes the characters’ surroundings, depicting the story and at the same time allowing my mind to picture the scenes. Well done!

Overall Enjoyment: 8/10
I like the ending part,

"Hey! What's your name again?"

The girl turned around and faced him, raising an eyebrow. "Have you forgotten? It's Da Bin,"

There’s this indescribable feeling. It’s like, DA Bin’s going away, leaving Jung Hoon with nothing but memories of their conversations and her name. It’s kind of sad.

Bonus marks: 4/5
The bonus marks is for a chapter expressing your gratitude to your readers and heh, for me to make up for the very-very-very late review.

Total marks: 73/90 (81%)


Addtional comments:
I am terribly sorry for the disgustingly-late review. The review came and then I went hiatus because of the project assignments I had on hand, I had five. After the projects ended, my final examinations started -.-

Anyways, good luck with your future fan fictions…!

Reviewed by v @midnight-tree.co.nr