Let Me Be Your Guardian Angel

Title: Let Me Be Your Guardian Angel

Author: by Angel15

URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/angel1501/

Reviewed by: Lamer_

Title = 8/10

Lovely title.. It did attract my attention when I first read it.. Suit the theme and mood of the story.. It does reveal a little about the story.. :)

Cast = 4/5

Lovely casting.. I love it a lot..

Foreword = 7/10

Lovely start.. It does reveal a little of what will happen in the story.. Keep the reader interested of reading the story.. It also let us know why you choose the title for the story.. Nice one.. I feel you mean need to add in a little more detail to spice up the foreword to be more interesting..

Poster & Background = 0/10

Well.. You have no poster or background for your story.. So sorry I have to give u a 0 for that..

Plot = 12/15

Your plot was pretty interesting.. The story flow was good.. But during some part, I find it a bit rush and bored.. Maybe you should add in more emotion for your character so that readers will feel how the character feels at that moments.. For example like, if Show aka Xiao Zhu was jealous, you can add in like the green monster of jealously is eating up him and turning him into a angry and sad person.. Well, That was just my personal views on emotion parts.. Hope you don’t get offend by it.. Sometime you can create a little cliff-hanger on the end to keep reader in suspense so they will by more anxious about reading the story.. I like to mark you up for some parts, like you made details about the events happening around but some part I deduct marks for it because you tend to rush into things for some events..

Originality & Creativity = 10 /15

Your story is interesting but the originality isn’t too much in it.. Your story sound like those romance story around winglin but your creativeness help out a bit.. You add in detail info for events and humor scenes which add marks to it.. I suggest you add in more feeling and emotional events into the detail to attract the readers heart and let them be like in the events.. Marks are taken of because of the lack of rriginality but I can see you tried your best in the creativity part..

Language (Spelling & Grammar) = 7.5/10

Found pretty much mistake in it..
Spelling mistake has a lot of part..
Like you tend to spell ok in sort form like K..
Do be careful for that mistake..
But overall..
It’s still all right..

Overall enjoyment = 17/20

I did enjoy the story.. It’s lovely and nice.. The part when Show tease and play with Jolin made me laugh sometimes.. How romantic Show is also touches my heart.. The detail info for the events also made me enjoy every moment of the story.. But.. As I mention time above.. Do try to add in more feeling and emotional for the character to spice up the whole story..

Reader Friendly = 5/5

Nice interaction with the readers.. Clearing they love the story very much.. Great job.. Full marks for you.. :)

Bonus Mark!
Link Back To Us: 0/3

Total: 70.5